tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post7616142922469743195..comments2023-10-20T06:07:29.429-07:00Comments on Storyqueen's Storycastle: An Abundance of EyebrowsUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-16647832865710054572009-09-25T17:48:56.558-07:002009-09-25T17:48:56.558-07:00I have too much "he said," or "she ...I have too much "he said," or "she said," - it gets hard mixing it up when there's a lot of conversation going on. Although I always try to. He chuckled, he shouted....he yawned?Paige Keiserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11693937018451168614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-81077396129364823162009-09-14T18:37:33.125-07:002009-09-14T18:37:33.125-07:00LOL! I notice eyebrows in published works all the ...LOL! I notice eyebrows in published works all the time. Arching of them. Raising of them. Scowling with them.<br />And I'm guilty of all!PJ Hooverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02602205868934777662noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-56960855454776842072009-09-12T08:04:56.462-07:002009-09-12T08:04:56.462-07:00Good luck with the first read! How exciting.
I ap...Good luck with the first read! How exciting.<br /><br />I apparently have too many characters in my manuscript...seems like an easy thing to fix but apparently, it isnt. LOL.JennyMachttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14594526663480442855noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-33367659262118123852009-09-12T06:40:09.272-07:002009-09-12T06:40:09.272-07:00YES!!!! And I wonder what the psychology is behind...YES!!!! And I wonder what the psychology is behind that. This post made me laugh out loud. Last year, my critique group pointed out how many times my characters glared and how many times my main character, Henry, patted his horse's neck. It was hysterical.Clementinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08745982305618408952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-91511803070044884892009-09-11T17:56:48.446-07:002009-09-11T17:56:48.446-07:00The eyes are the window to the soul. So maybe have...The eyes are the window to the soul. So maybe have their eyes do some of the expressing? Or a smirk? I think I need to infuse my ms. with a little eyebrow action, actually.Stephanie Farishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10461865229341760836noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-74643519364814142352009-09-11T16:01:41.909-07:002009-09-11T16:01:41.909-07:00Lady G- Wow. The famous Lady Glam stopped by my ...Lady G- Wow. The famous Lady Glam stopped by my blog! You are a legend in the blogverse, I hear.<br />I'll think about using hands...when I'm brave enough to sneak a peek, that is.<br /><br />Jessie-Thanks for checking out the book. I love them all, but Take Care, Good Knight is a particular favorite amongst the kids at my school.storyqueenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07039684494823420722noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-19538288852112897782009-09-11T07:25:37.381-07:002009-09-11T07:25:37.381-07:00I focus on my characters' breathing and heartr...I focus on my characters' breathing and heartrates (usually when they are nervous or especially in love). Maybe because I'm a nurse. Have to get away from that. The reader probably doesn't need to know their vital signs. <br /><br />By the way, I saw your book at the library the other day (Take Care, Good Knight...that one). It is our nighttime book this week. Excited to read the others.Jessie Oliveroshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06232456334069794107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-72174883266855808492009-09-10T16:59:51.534-07:002009-09-10T16:59:51.534-07:00This post is so great! I use eyebrows a lot, too. ...This post is so great! I use eyebrows a lot, too. It's so weird. I think it's because eyebrows are where most of the emotion is. That, and the eyes. I did a post about eyes awhile ago, right <a href="http://theinnocentflower.blogspot.com/2009/06/eye-see-you.html" rel="nofollow">here</a><br /><br />Just like Lazy Writer, eyes are one of my biggest problems. And it's definitely hard to get around.<br /><br />Try focusing on other things like hand gestures or posture. That helps a little.Michelle D. Argylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696465137285587646noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-56556828948224260682009-09-10T15:25:32.380-07:002009-09-10T15:25:32.380-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.storyqueenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07039684494823420722noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-70238364761838797872009-09-10T15:25:24.249-07:002009-09-10T15:25:24.249-07:00L and L-ooooh, fidgeting. I like that. And thank...L and L-ooooh, fidgeting. I like that. And thanks for the luck. Going to need it big time.<br /><br />Renee- I dig the passing glances...sounds illicit....probably wouldn't work in the ole middle grade,though!<br /><br />Lazy- I bet you are right about the eyes. I never thought of it that way....but yes, they are the window to the soul.<br /><br />Tricia-Heck, I love to read about food!! Don't starve your characters for too long. And if I named a picture book "an Abundance of Eyebrows" I think John Green (author of An Abundance of Katherines) might get a little tweaked.)<br /><br />M.C.- nope, not about eyebrows....no reason to have so many eyebrow references (she said whilst raising her eyebrows, nudge, nudge, wink, wink.)<br /><br />Dawn- Thanks. I am just dreading it. I have convinced myself that's it's pretty cruddy and am afraid to read it and confirm my suspicions.storyqueenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07039684494823420722noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-60806389504526479562009-09-10T13:53:29.102-07:002009-09-10T13:53:29.102-07:00I'm with Lazy Writer: eyes. I did find an eyeb...I'm with Lazy Writer: eyes. I did find an eyebrow section in my ms a few days ago, though, so your timing with this post cracks me up. When I saw the title I thought, Maybe I'm not the only one. And I'm not! (This discovery, of course, made me raise my eyebrows.)<br /><br />I totally get the revision thing. Good luck with it, and I agree with the first comment--I bet you'll be surprised at how good it is. You recently made a comment about revision on my blog that was so right on: give me a blank page to start a new draft! There IS so much at stake with that revision. Good luck!Dawn Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05667675689038435581noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-412253528645178752009-09-10T08:54:17.352-07:002009-09-10T08:54:17.352-07:00I'm an eye roller, too. BTW, if your book is A...I'm an eye roller, too. BTW, if your book is ABOUT eyebrows, then you can't possibly have too many! :)MG Higginshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03584010470283038023noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-40836387541421065482009-09-10T08:14:14.144-07:002009-09-10T08:14:14.144-07:00Abundance of eyebrows! The visual is priceless. Co...Abundance of eyebrows! The visual is priceless. Could be a hilarious storybook, Ms Storyqueen.<br />Anyway, back to being Serious Writerly Blogger, when I started the first draft I noticed I was putting too many meals in. I have decided to starve my characters for a bit. :)Tricia J. O'Brienhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05993110400088806252noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-32609960852099469492009-09-09T22:09:41.679-07:002009-09-09T22:09:41.679-07:00Eyes, eyes, eyes, and more eyes! I can't seem...Eyes, eyes, eyes, and more eyes! I can't seem to stay away from that feature. I think anything to do with the eyes is a weakness for most writers because the eyes do tend to tell what a person is feeling more than any other body part.Susan R. Millshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09578747592345750650noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-36516104008980245292009-09-09T21:37:59.900-07:002009-09-09T21:37:59.900-07:00hahaha, oh yes, I do. My characters are constantly...hahaha, oh yes, I do. My characters are constantly looking at each other, passing glances, staring, peering at, and turning their gazes to each other, etc. etc. etc. :)Renee Collinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08170818341212519937noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3293818069256266954.post-9165970991229698752009-09-09T21:29:42.320-07:002009-09-09T21:29:42.320-07:00Um...yeah, our characters are always fidgeting and...Um...yeah, our characters are always fidgeting and rolling their eyes. It's sort of a mess. <br /><br />Good luck with your first read! I bet you'll be pleasantly surprised by your awesomeness.lisa and laurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18144863275895761642noreply@blogger.com